Read your story, Krellin, and am reasonably impressed. Also read the previous comments. Those of Abgemacht and Synapse seem very pertinent. May refer to them as I add my tuppenceworth. Hope not to offend. It’s a good start.
Personally found it difficult to get into, because the opening sections come over as quite juvenile writing stylistically, reminding me very much of SF short stories of the 50’s, or a story from ‘the ‘Astounding Stories’ comics, or an episode of the original ‘Twilight Zone’. However, as I persevered, I found that this could prove quite a clever stylistic device. In such stories, the characters tended to be one-dimensional, the dialogue stilted and predictable, setting off-the-shelf, backstory, if any, merely sketched in, and the plot simplistic, usually with the intention of making a final (usually heavy-handed) moral point which reflected on the society of the time. Still, why *not* go retro? Your story made me nostalgic for my childhood SF obsession. Could have the same effect on others of my generation.
Other points have been made already, so I’ll move to your proposed continuation.
The story began to pick up right at the very end when the two college girls installed the boyfriend’s indie app. Why were they ‘giggling almost uncontrollably’? Obviously, they know what this app can do and may not be such ‘Kind Girls’ as Cynthia thinks. It may be totally inappropriate for young girls to experience. You mention ‘pleasure, manipulation, addiction, malevolent ai’. Now we’re going somewhere interesting. That could then drive the story forward without need for a further medical intervention. Think one is enough, or we’re going to spend all our time in ER.
Just some thoughts. Disregard at will.